Sunday, August 14, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday


This week's excerpt is from a short story I'm working on called Mating Run.

"Davey Spooner is standing over there by the bar. You know he’s got a thing for you, and he’s really cute. All you have to do is give him a little encouragement, and he’ll be all over you like white on rice.”
Maggie gave a choked laugh, making sure she didn’t glance in the direction her friend had indicated, and murmured,  “He’s a nice guy, Sasha, but –”
“No buts. You said you were ready to forget about that dumbass werewolf Caleb Blake and move forward, so look over there and smile at him, damn it.”





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44 comments:

  1. Great 6. I can't make up my mind whether she's just walked away from trouble or walking into it.

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  2. Okay, I have to admit I love the phrase "dumb ass werewolf." We don't see that used often enough in fiction.

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  3. Great advice--"...so look over there and smile at him, dammit." Cheeky six! Makes me want more.

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  4. Nopoe - I vote for the werewolf - dumb ass or not - :D

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  5. 'Dumb-ass werewolf' made me smile. I hope she looks over!

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  6. You created a great sense of their friendship in the dialogue. Well written. A fantastic six!

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  7. Great Six, Bree! Poor Davey, that smile just might get him into trouble with the 'Dumb-ass werewolf' ;)

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  8. Everybody could use a friend who can give step-by-step instructions on how to flirt.

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  9. Yeah, I have to throw my support in for the amusement value of "dumb-ass werewolf". That made me laugh out loud.

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  10. LOL Everybody needs a friend like that. "look over there and smile at him, damn it." Pure awesome.

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  11. Yes, yes - smile at him, dammit! Loved this snippet. :)

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  12. Great friend or misguided friend? Can't wait to find out : )

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  13. Raises all sorts of questions that I need to know the answer to! Looking forward to more.

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  14. Go on then - smile at him! Ah, but is she really ready to forget the dumbass werewolf?

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  15. I love it when a friend is able to give sound advice. Great six!

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  16. Love the way her friend is so bossy. Where would we be without our friends?

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  17. Wow, what a friend! I think I'd be a little reluctant without even meeting the guy. A great six!

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  18. Hmmm.....Advice can be a dangerous thing. To give or take.

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  19. A bossy friend, a "dumb-ass werewolf," and a girl who has to make up her mind. Great combination! Great six!

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  20. LOL! I think every woman has at least one friend like that. Great job!

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  21. What a great friend -- I think! It's the best way to forget werewolves.

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  22. LOL! I think we all have, and need, a friend like that in our lives.

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  23. 'best way to forget werewolves' LOL... as if you can forget them, unless, of course, someone 'better' comes along... here's hoping it has for her!

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  24. Why do I think she's not gonna go for Davey? ;)

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  25. Love this diaglogue! Bet she is going to get herself into a bit of a predicament!

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  26. Ah, time for the 'someone else'. Will it stick?? ;)

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  27. Yes, get over there girl and smile! Great six!

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  28. I loved the friends personality that comes through stong in this six. Dumb-ass werewolve made me laugh. Great six :)

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  29. I love this dialogue. It sounds exactly like it should -- one girlfriend urging the other on. I'll read more to find out what Maggie does.

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  30. Great snippet. Love that last line: "so look over there and smile at him, damn it.” Great attitude. Sounds like a great friend.

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  31. Intriguing situation. Maggie's werewolf ex may or may not be history, but what do we know about the guy her friend wants her to smile at? Only one way to find out--read more!

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  32. So charming and fun! Thanks for sharing!

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  33. Friends. They remember what you said, and follow through. Of course I'm intrigued by both of the potential male leads... oh yes, and you gave me portraits of them, as well as a decision to be made, in a mere six lines. Nice.

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  34. Nothing like drowning your sorrows in someone else!

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  35. Super Six. Thanks for sharing it

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