Sunday, August 14, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday


This week's excerpt is from a short story I'm working on called Mating Run.

"Davey Spooner is standing over there by the bar. You know he’s got a thing for you, and he’s really cute. All you have to do is give him a little encouragement, and he’ll be all over you like white on rice.”
Maggie gave a choked laugh, making sure she didn’t glance in the direction her friend had indicated, and murmured,  “He’s a nice guy, Sasha, but –”
“No buts. You said you were ready to forget about that dumbass werewolf Caleb Blake and move forward, so look over there and smile at him, damn it.”





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42 comments:

  1. Sherry GloagAugust 14, 2011 at 4:35 AM

    Great 6. I can't make up my mind whether she's just walked away from trouble or walking into it.

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  2. Marie DeesAugust 14, 2011 at 8:04 AM

    Okay, I have to admit I love the phrase "dumb ass werewolf." We don't see that used often enough in fiction.

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  3. Gem SivadAugust 14, 2011 at 9:23 AM

    Great advice--"...so look over there and smile at him, dammit." Cheeky six! Makes me want more.

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  4. AnonymousAugust 14, 2011 at 9:32 AM

    'Dumb-ass werewolf' made me smile. I hope she looks over!

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  5. Lisa FoxAugust 14, 2011 at 9:35 AM

    Now that is a great friend!

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  6. AlixAugust 14, 2011 at 9:36 AM

    You created a great sense of their friendship in the dialogue. Well written. A fantastic six!

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  7. Serena ShayAugust 14, 2011 at 9:45 AM

    Great Six, Bree! Poor Davey, that smile just might get him into trouble with the 'Dumb-ass werewolf' ;)

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  8. Cara BristolAugust 14, 2011 at 10:06 AM

    Everybody could use a friend who can give step-by-step instructions on how to flirt.

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  9. J.A. BeardAugust 14, 2011 at 10:22 AM

    Yeah, I have to throw my support in for the amusement value of "dumb-ass werewolf". That made me laugh out loud.

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  10. lexcadeAugust 14, 2011 at 10:24 AM

    LOL Everybody needs a friend like that. "look over there and smile at him, damn it." Pure awesome.

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  11. Zee MonodeeAugust 14, 2011 at 10:25 AM

    Yes, yes - smile at him, dammit! Loved this snippet. :)

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  12. UnknownAugust 14, 2011 at 10:43 AM

    Great friend or misguided friend? Can't wait to find out : )

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  13. Cate MastersAugust 14, 2011 at 11:10 AM

    Raises all sorts of questions that I need to know the answer to! Looking forward to more.

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  14. Paula MartinAugust 14, 2011 at 11:15 AM

    Go on then - smile at him! Ah, but is she really ready to forget the dumbass werewolf?

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  15. PiperAugust 14, 2011 at 11:21 AM

    I love it when a friend is able to give sound advice. Great six!

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  16. AnonymousAugust 14, 2011 at 11:32 AM

    LOL! Funny six! Gotta love a good friend.

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  17. Suzie QuintAugust 14, 2011 at 11:44 AM

    Love the way her friend is so bossy. Where would we be without our friends?

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  18. Jessica E. SubjectAugust 14, 2011 at 11:58 AM

    Wow, what a friend! I think I'd be a little reluctant without even meeting the guy. A great six!

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  19. Sandra SookooAugust 14, 2011 at 12:05 PM

    lol love the pushy friend!

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  20. SondraAugust 14, 2011 at 12:25 PM

    Hmmm.....Advice can be a dangerous thing. To give or take.

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  21. JennaAugust 14, 2011 at 12:28 PM

    A bossy friend, a "dumb-ass werewolf," and a girl who has to make up her mind. Great combination! Great six!

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  22. D CarneyAugust 14, 2011 at 12:34 PM

    LOL! I think every woman has at least one friend like that. Great job!

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  23. Jessica KnaussAugust 14, 2011 at 12:42 PM

    What a great friend -- I think! It's the best way to forget werewolves.

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  24. Monica Enderle PierceAugust 14, 2011 at 12:52 PM

    LOL! I think we all have, and need, a friend like that in our lives.

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  25. Savanna KougarAugust 14, 2011 at 1:34 PM

    'best way to forget werewolves' LOL... as if you can forget them, unless, of course, someone 'better' comes along... here's hoping it has for her!

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  26. Lex ValentineAugust 14, 2011 at 1:36 PM

    Why do I think she's not gonna go for Davey? ;)

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  27. UnknownAugust 14, 2011 at 1:37 PM

    Love this diaglogue! Bet she is going to get herself into a bit of a predicament!

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  28. Aimee LaineAugust 14, 2011 at 2:21 PM

    Ah, time for the 'someone else'. Will it stick?? ;)

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  29. Gemma ParkesAugust 14, 2011 at 2:55 PM

    Yes, get over there girl and smile! Great six!

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  30. Karysa FaireAugust 14, 2011 at 2:58 PM

    I have become such a fan!

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  31. AnonymousAugust 14, 2011 at 4:29 PM

    I loved the friends personality that comes through stong in this six. Dumb-ass werewolve made me laugh. Great six :)

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  32. Sandy NachlingerAugust 14, 2011 at 5:06 PM

    I love this dialogue. It sounds exactly like it should -- one girlfriend urging the other on. I'll read more to find out what Maggie does.

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  33. Joanne StewartAugust 14, 2011 at 5:08 PM

    Great snippet. Love that last line: "so look over there and smile at him, damn it.” Great attitude. Sounds like a great friend.

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  34. AnonymousAugust 14, 2011 at 5:36 PM

    Intriguing situation. Maggie's werewolf ex may or may not be history, but what do we know about the guy her friend wants her to smile at? Only one way to find out--read more!

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  35. Vivien DeanAugust 14, 2011 at 7:35 PM

    So charming and fun! Thanks for sharing!

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  36. E. P. BeaumontAugust 14, 2011 at 9:23 PM

    Friends. They remember what you said, and follow through. Of course I'm intrigued by both of the potential male leads... oh yes, and you gave me portraits of them, as well as a decision to be made, in a mere six lines. Nice.

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  37. UnknownAugust 14, 2011 at 10:16 PM

    Cute six. :)

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  38. AnonymousAugust 15, 2011 at 12:19 AM

    Nothing like drowning your sorrows in someone else!

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  39. AnonymousAugust 15, 2011 at 5:33 AM

    'Damit!' A great friend.. Nice six

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  40. Jayel KayeAugust 15, 2011 at 10:27 AM

    Super Six. Thanks for sharing it

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  41. Lucy FelthouseAugust 15, 2011 at 11:56 AM

    Hehe, great six! Well done :)

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  42. Brien MichaelsAugust 16, 2011 at 4:32 PM

    I love it! Fabulous six!

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