Sunday, July 17, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday



This is an excerpt from my current WIP. It's called Thirst, and it's the second book in my All-American Vampires series.



Claire hated being a vampire. When she’d first been turned, it had taken everything in her to drink blood from a live donor without puking. She was not aggressive or predatory. She was squeamish and introverted, shy and quiet. In other words, she was absolutely everything that a vampire was not. If it weren’t so pathetic, it would be funny.
  
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45 comments:

  1. AnonymousJuly 17, 2011 at 4:15 AM

    I like the voice of a reluctant vampire - interesting stuff! More please.

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  2. Graylin FoxJuly 17, 2011 at 8:35 AM

    I agree with Liz, the reluctant vampires have so much emotion to play with. Great six!

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  3. Lorien VelezJuly 17, 2011 at 8:52 AM

    Great insight from Claire's POV. Love your Tattooed Tuesday as well. ;)

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  4. AlixJuly 17, 2011 at 8:52 AM

    Fantastic descriptive six, I connected with her immediately. Thank you.

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  5. Marie DeesJuly 17, 2011 at 8:53 AM

    Nice six. Love that she just doesn't fit in the vampire mold.

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  6. Cara BristolJuly 17, 2011 at 9:04 AM

    It's tough to be a vampire, when it doesn't suit you. There's no going back.

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  7. Jayel KayeJuly 17, 2011 at 9:12 AM

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  8. Jayel KayeJuly 17, 2011 at 9:13 AM

    A reluctant Vampire. How wonderful!!

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  9. Serena ShayJuly 17, 2011 at 9:28 AM

    Nice job showing us Claire so well in six sentences! I'm already feeling bad for her! I hope she has a partner who will bring out more of her vampy side. ~wink~

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  10. UnknownJuly 17, 2011 at 9:30 AM

    Poor Claire. :( She seems very sweet.

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  11. AnonymousJuly 17, 2011 at 9:56 AM

    an introvert vampire - well she can use the blood banks - love vamps you can do so much with them and am sure you will - good six

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  12. AnonymousJuly 17, 2011 at 10:16 AM

    Very good six. I get a great pic of her character.

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  13. Carolyn RosewoodJuly 17, 2011 at 10:45 AM

    Great insight into her character! Well done! :)

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  14. AnonymousJuly 17, 2011 at 10:54 AM

    Nice take on the usual vamp. I look forward to reading more :)

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  15. JennaJuly 17, 2011 at 11:00 AM

    I love that she's squeemish about drinking blood. A reluctant vampire seems strange, but not everyone is Dracula! I do love her voice, however, the loathing for her circumstances and her inadequacies comes across clearly. Great job!

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  16. Cate MastersJuly 17, 2011 at 11:22 AM

    Wonderful internal conflict. Excellent snippet

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  17. SondraJuly 17, 2011 at 11:46 AM

    You've drawn her character very well in only 6 sentences. I can tell your wip is going to be a page-turner.

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  18. Monica Enderle PierceJuly 17, 2011 at 11:55 AM

    Terrific job setting the stage for Claire's internal and external battles. Multi-level conflict always makes for a great read, and it sounds like you've got a great one going.

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  19. Luxie RyderJuly 17, 2011 at 12:02 PM

    It's really easy to connect with her. Interesting six!

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  20. Suzie QuintJuly 17, 2011 at 12:08 PM

    I love when conflict grows out of character. Good job. Especially for only 6 sentences.

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  21. Angela S. StoneJuly 17, 2011 at 12:14 PM

    Ohh!! Shy interverted vampire! I love it!!

    xx
    A.

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  22. Lauri J OwenJuly 17, 2011 at 12:15 PM

    Ohhh -- poor thing! Wonder why someone thought she'd be the right choice to turn! great six.

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  23. Lisa FoxJuly 17, 2011 at 12:19 PM

    Poor Claire. Hopefully she'll loosen up a bit.

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  24. Jessica KnaussJuly 17, 2011 at 12:39 PM

    She's got some issues! Which is perfect for a good character.

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  25. AnonymousJuly 17, 2011 at 1:21 PM

    I like her already! Want to read more.

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  26. Nichelle GregoryJuly 17, 2011 at 1:58 PM

    Intriguing six, Bree and I love the photo too! ;)

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  27. AnonymousJuly 17, 2011 at 2:28 PM

    I love it, fantastic start to an intriguing story, well done.

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  28. Savanna KougarJuly 17, 2011 at 2:36 PM

    Excellent character development. I'm feeling for her already.

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  29. Gem SivadJuly 17, 2011 at 2:42 PM

    You've made her very sympathetic and tweaked my curiosity. I need to know how she deals with her vampire existence. Great six!

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  30. Sam CrescentJuly 17, 2011 at 3:25 PM

    Excellent description, I love how the picture helped with the imagery and I love your style.

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  31. J.C. MartinJuly 17, 2011 at 4:02 PM

    Echoing everyone else's comments. Love the voice in this, and the image of a reluctant vampire!

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  32. AnonymousJuly 17, 2011 at 4:08 PM

    Souns like she has major self-esteem issues going here. Do they have shrinks for that.

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  33. SonyaJuly 17, 2011 at 4:14 PM

    Claire certainly sounds like a different sort of vamp. Sounds like she'll make a great character!

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  34. Paula MartinJuly 17, 2011 at 5:19 PM

    I'm not into vampires at all, but I do like the idea of reluctant vampire!

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  35. AnonymousJuly 17, 2011 at 9:07 PM

    Poor Claire! I hope she makes peace with who and what she is, sooner over later.

    Dawn's Early Light 6SS

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  36. E. P. BeaumontJuly 17, 2011 at 9:43 PM

    Conflicted, squeamish vampire... yes, I have to read more.

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  37. Zee MonodeeJuly 18, 2011 at 12:36 AM

    The poor thing! Now I need to read more. :)

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  38. UnknownJuly 18, 2011 at 3:13 AM

    Great internal conflict for a "predator" to have! Now, I need to find out how she got in her predicatment! More please...

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  39. Pippa JayJuly 18, 2011 at 8:45 AM

    Poor thing! :(

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  40. AnonymousJuly 18, 2011 at 10:07 AM

    Poor girl. This was intriguing! Great six!

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  41. lexcadeJuly 18, 2011 at 10:22 AM

    Oooh, I love a reluctant vamp. So many ways you can go with them. Intriguing six!

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  42. Lucy FelthouseJuly 18, 2011 at 11:27 AM

    This sounds great - I love the character's voice already!

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  43. AnonymousJuly 18, 2011 at 7:15 PM

    Love the voice in this. Well done!

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  44. Lynne MurrayJuly 18, 2011 at 9:04 PM

    I love characters that play against type--a reluctant predator is intriguing! Nice conflict in just six sentences!

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  45. BreeJuly 19, 2011 at 12:19 AM

    Thanks to everyone for reading and commenting.

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