Sunday, July 31, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday



Today's excerpt, like the last two weeks, comes from
Thirst, All-American Vampires 2, my latest WIP.


“I said sit down, Miss Landry. I suggest you do as I say and not test my patience any further than you already have today.”

The cold menace in his voice sent a shiver of trepidation down her spine and she automatically moved forward and pulled out one of the chairs. She glanced over at him as she sat. Hawk remained still and silent, his piercing gaze moving over her as if he were trying to figure her out. She knew he was good at his job, and for the first time became worried that she might have gotten in over her head.




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32 comments:

  1. Lisa FoxJuly 31, 2011 at 9:43 AM

    Very intense!

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  2. AlixJuly 31, 2011 at 9:53 AM

    I'm anxious for her now. Fantastic six, beautifully written. Thank you.

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  3. AnonymousJuly 31, 2011 at 10:06 AM

    Yes, very intense - he has me scared. More please.

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  4. AnonymousJuly 31, 2011 at 10:12 AM

    The last line is great! I definately think she's in over her head. I would love to read more.

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  5. Gem SivadJuly 31, 2011 at 10:36 AM

    Love the name Hawk and yep, I think he's in charge whether she likes it or not. Great six!

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  6. sueJuly 31, 2011 at 10:39 AM

    well she may well be over her head - we shall see. Nice snippet

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  7. Cara BristolJuly 31, 2011 at 10:42 AM

    Enjoyed this scene tremendously. Great six.

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  8. Jayel KayeJuly 31, 2011 at 12:06 PM

    no! what?! what happens net?

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  9. Jessica KnaussJuly 31, 2011 at 1:10 PM

    Very tense scene... If there were more I would be reading very fast!

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  10. Ursula WhistlerJuly 31, 2011 at 1:36 PM

    Nice six. I feel the scene.

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  11. Sandra SookooJuly 31, 2011 at 1:39 PM

    Love the intensity!

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  12. Cate MastersJuly 31, 2011 at 2:24 PM

    Oo, Hawk sounds like someone she shouldn't piss off! Looking forward to more of this.

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  13. AnonymousJuly 31, 2011 at 2:25 PM

    Love the tension.

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  14. Lex ValentineJuly 31, 2011 at 2:35 PM

    Oh, the suspense! I want more!

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  15. Karysa FaireJuly 31, 2011 at 3:06 PM

    Hopefully she has gotten in over her head. ;-) Love Hawk. . .I want to read the whole thing.

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  16. JennaJuly 31, 2011 at 3:27 PM

    Even the name Hawk suggests a predator. I think she's smart (if a bit late) to think she's over her head. If only there were more to read...

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  17. Monica Enderle PierceJuly 31, 2011 at 4:25 PM

    Nice tension. I find it interesting that she knew he was good at his job, but ignored that and got in over her head anyway.

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  18. Marie DeesJuly 31, 2011 at 5:56 PM

    Great six!

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  19. D CarneyJuly 31, 2011 at 7:33 PM

    I probably shouldn't, but I'm loving me some Hawk about now. ;)

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  20. Jennifer Lowery (Kamptner)July 31, 2011 at 7:35 PM

    Intense, descriptive six! Thanks for sharing!

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  21. BreeJuly 31, 2011 at 7:37 PM

    She's definitely in over her head, but she didn't have any choice. But I can't say any more. ;)

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  22. Jessica E. SubjectJuly 31, 2011 at 7:41 PM

    I read the excerpt and just wanted to keep reading. Well done!

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  23. SonyaJuly 31, 2011 at 7:43 PM

    Not sure if I should, but I find myself liking Hawk. Great six!

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  24. J.A. BeardJuly 31, 2011 at 8:08 PM

    A lot of good tension in this. I'm definitely concerned for her.

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  25. UnknownJuly 31, 2011 at 8:16 PM

    Uh-oh, sounds like she's in trouble!

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  26. Lynne MurrayJuly 31, 2011 at 8:42 PM

    Intriguing six, she's in trouble, but we need to find out how--great hook, great six!

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  27. Verna ClayJuly 31, 2011 at 9:51 PM

    Oh, I think she's in over her head; no doubt about it.

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  28. Serena ShayJuly 31, 2011 at 10:00 PM

    Awesome six, Bree!

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  29. gemma parkesAugust 1, 2011 at 2:37 PM

    What's he going to do to her? argh! loved it!

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  30. AnonymousAugust 1, 2011 at 2:56 PM

    Great name to describe the guy - 'Hawk.' Great snippet!

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  31. Hailey EdwardsAugust 2, 2011 at 8:26 PM

    Uh oh, sounds like she's going to be in trouble.

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  32. Nichelle GregoryAugust 3, 2011 at 9:52 PM

    Love the hero's name and his commanding presence! I want to read more!

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