Another excerpt from Thirst: All-American Vampires 2, my current WIP.
“I could tell pretty quickly that there was no way we could get away, so I told them—” Claire licked her lips and dropped her gaze to her hands where they rested in her lap. “I told them that I’d do whatever they wanted to me if they left Cassie alone. So they did.”
Hawk waited for her to continue, but the silence drew out. He could imagine what had happened next and and clenched his fists at the overpowering rage he felt to kill those who had hurt her.
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Oh my, sounds like having Hawk as a protector would be a very good thing. ~wink~ Fabulous six, Bree!
ReplyDeleteWhat a terrible, powerful six. Cassie seems strong, but it is nice that Hawk is there now.
ReplyDeleteI love how concise and quiet the first part is but the subtext from Claire deafening. Hawk's reaction is perfect.
ReplyDeleteOh wow, how great is this? Well done!! Love the photo, too!
ReplyDeleteLove a strong heroine and an even stronger hero. Nice six.
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely fantastic six! You handled the sensitivity and the anger to make it very very real. WOW well done!
ReplyDeleteClaire seems so unselfish and loving. Now I hope Hawk kicks those guys' asses to the moon & back!
ReplyDeleteI like Hawk's protective instinct. Nice work!
ReplyDeletewell done!
ReplyDeleteThis six has great emotion. I love Hawk's protectivness.
ReplyDeleteHer silence speaks volumes! Fab six!
ReplyDeleteWhat book is this, tell me please. I want it
ReplyDeleteIncredibly powerful. I did wonder why she dropped her eyes into her hands, why they had fallen out of her head... but I'm probably the only one!
ReplyDeleteHer simple body language tells the horror she's been through. Well done!
ReplyDeletePowerful snippet. I love it and the pic!
ReplyDeleteExcellent description, very vivid scene. Great job!
ReplyDeleteOh, that silence does not sound like a good thing. Very powerful!
ReplyDeleteThis is amazing. Well done.
ReplyDeleteOh, I love the power in him.
ReplyDeleteSo much revealed in six sentences - well done!
ReplyDeleteI am DIEING for this to come out!
ReplyDeleteo_O I want to read the rest!
ReplyDelete"So they did." I love how you get the reader involved in imagining what happened with that simple statement and then when Hawk thinks he can imagine what happened next, we're picturing it even more. Great six.
ReplyDeleteOh gosh, I hope Hawk gets to dish out some of that rage.
ReplyDeleteGod, I dread to think what happened! Intriguing snippet!
ReplyDeleteShe sounds so fragile in this, I hope she is strong.
ReplyDeleteIntense. Hope Hawk heals her.
ReplyDeleteOh, I like Hawk! Go get 'em, hon! Great six!
ReplyDeleteWell, what a good explanation. Enjoyed your six!
ReplyDeleteWow...intense...and soooo sad! Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteSubtle, simple and wonderfully written.
ReplyDeleteThe dialogue and body language, perfect and heartbreaking.
ReplyDelete~Xakara
A Way To a Dragon's Heart 6SS
Poor thing, but at least it sounds like Hawk is there to do what he has to.
ReplyDeleteThere's a LOT of heartache in there!
ReplyDeleteHer shame and his anger shine through. Very moving six.
ReplyDeleteThanks to everyone who read and commented!
ReplyDeleteLots of pain and motivation for revenged packed into just a few words. Powerful six!
ReplyDeleteEeek, all kinds of horrors running thru my head now. :(
ReplyDeleteI like the way these two interact and the way your words made my imagination go into over-drive.
ReplyDeleteGreat writing.
What a lot you have revealed in these excellent six sentences. Well done!
ReplyDeleteWhat did they do? Ah, great six! Gotta know what happened!
ReplyDeletePowerful six. I hope Hawk follows through.
ReplyDeleteI'm hooked! Gimme more!
ReplyDeleteBut wait! What did she tell them?!
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